I presume you’re the daddy of the writer and it’s why babble so much to defend its work, but your args are flat and misplaced.
Your comment are more to do with time-laps incoherence of where things are said and would’ve theoretically only make sens if we had take another choice (the expected one) like here:
> Nephilim: Yeah. I asked Gibs when I saw him if he could craft me a sword …
This phrase would theoretically only make sens if we had choose to visit Gibson, not go not exploring with Alice.
There are other part in the story like that but I’m not going to list them all.

False, it’s exactly how goes some part of the story:
> Nephilim: Why … why would you tell me all this?
> Eliza: I … I can’t explain it, really. I don’t know if it’s because you saved me, but I feel comfortable around you.
This kind of things is a common way to make sure some prerequisites knowledge about a certainly character are meet.

To up what the previous Anonymous Fapper said, it’s true for me too that the writing seems to be from a teenager (it’s not this far from the writing I had at this period).
It seems that the original story tells the love he had toward a certain girl (Heliza in the story) since there is many choices in the game but +90% of them are to romance her. Off course it’s put in a fantasy setting (maybe one of some he dreamed of). The possibility to romance other characters seems the have been integrated afterward for the sake of choices (and it’s good, don’t take me wrong), but the focus still stay be on Eliza (and that it’s boring and stupid).

There is also real dumb interactions sometimes and some choices let me dubious concerning the mentality of the writer (teenager or not), like:
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• the fight with Rammus and Irene
• Just after Eliza struck Rammus, she directly take the time to small talk with Nephilim and Irene just go bitching upon Rammus, it’s really not how a real fight would go in a time like this because it’s pretty risky and stupid to do that.
• Then at the end, killing Rammus is no problem, but killing Irene (that was as murderous as him) is taking the dark path? So much sexism bullshit.
• the fight with the Shado-Jin
• “Threatening someone I care about”? No, for me it’s more about the fact that he’s threatening someone that don’t have anything to do with why they are fighting.
• So killing someone that threatened the live of innocent people is taking the dark path?
• the fight with the berserker
• He fight the berserker until this one punch him away, then is a if the berserker don’t exist anymore, Nephilim and Eliza even take the time to discuss a little while he carry her so she can sit somewhere aside… at the to of a wall.

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Oh and I take the opportunity to say that when we need to carry someone in our arms, one arm need to be at mid-thigh and the other at torso level, and not at the butt and neck level.

Also, seriously, how many times they say “there is more to him than meets the eye” (or “to you”)? To many times to my taste.

However, all that said, this game is none-less interesting and enjoyable (if we skip the boring stuff with Eliza).

Oh and I was forgot to mention the incel choice:
> She’s my girl.
No one is your property dude.

All I am going to say is "Go get some help, you have some real mental issues bordering on delusional" in other words go check your fucking brain idiot cause you just an essay that is fucking worse then the writing in the game you even went as far as to complain about how to carry a girl, is that something a normal saine person does? I think not!

Dude, I know it’s hard to take criticisms and I also know that insinuated that you’re probably a teenager can put you on the edge, but you should learn to take constructive critics with a bit more ease because just discard all criticism will not help you to improve.
If it’s my theory concerning why Eliza is being pushed for romance +90% of times that puts you on the edge, then note that it was just that: a theory.
As for the part concerning how to carry “someone” (and not just a “girl” like you said in your reply), as I said, I’ve just “take the opportunity” of commentating to point out a little detail that caught my eyes when I seen the scene (as the eyes of anyone that would have little knowledge on the matter), something easy to fix that would give a little more credibility to this scene (and by extension, to the game).
And sorry in advance to deduce that you’re probably the writer for taking this criticism so badly… but surely you’re just the same “daddy” as below.